FMP Statement of Intent Workshop

First draft of my FMP Statement of Intent + notes and corrections made in workshop group:  

Through discussion with Lorenzo and the group it became apparent that I need to revise my rationale. 'Print driven graphic design and art direction' was the original but since the workshop I have changed it to 'Print driven graphic design for the culture sector with a focus on delivery.'  This is not only more direct it mentions the specific industry and context I want my work to operate in. The focus on delivery reflects the focus on print, production, presentation, packaging and methods of delivery within my design practice. The new statement has far better clarity and specific context. Now its time to write the next draft using the notes on the above!